The Cycle

[Cory]

I Just Wrote This, Tell Me What You Think, Give Me Suggestions To Improve Upon

Everybody thought you had it made.

You had the looks and the friends; you were king of your domain.

It seemed your popularity would never fade.

Yet every night you thought of piercing your placid veins.



You searched the world for a fill for your emptiness.

Nothing ever seemed to fill the void.

Once you found a crutch but in the end it made you fall even more.

Face against the floor, Paramedics rushed you straight out the door.



You finally made a proclamation, to follow Christ and lead the Nation.

All the while you could never stand being undermined by the heretics' hand.

You claimed you were on fire for Christ yet your flames were just smoldering embers.

You started to play the popularity game.



What was church to you? Nothing more than a hangout.

Were you ever aware of your hearts intent?

The cliques that you led and deceived,

You really showed them what it was like to be Christian.

How many of them follow Christ now?

How many of them seen past your false Christian mask?




How come I don’t see you no more?
Has your perfect life become such a bore?

Was the world glad to take you back,

To give you another void?

Are you still searching for the answer?

Don’t fear, the world’s cycle will bring you back.

[Damaris]

That was good! Kind of depressing, but true about some people.

Since you asked for suggestions, mine is for the last line of the poem to be changed. It doesn't quite seem to fit in as well with the other lines, but that's just my opinion. Good job!

[MyJoyOverflows]

Great poem! I really liked it!